Wikipedia:Peer review/Kitty Marion/archive1

I've listed this article for peer review because I'm planning on nominating it for Featured article status, and would like a second pair of eyes to check the prose and the Manual of Style compliance.

Thanks, Noleander (talk) 14:54, 23 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Noleander, overall its a very-well written article, but here's some issues I noticed whilst reading.
Early years

• Marion is variously called Katharina or Marion, which is inconsistent - also wasn't her surname Schäfer at the time?
• her German uncle is it really important to specify that her uncle was German given that she was too?

Acting career

• Music halls were a more cosmopolitan, diverse, and liberal environment compared to the rest of Victorian England How so?

Birth control movement in US

• Articles in the US often referred to as an "English militant." "her" should probably be in between "to" and "as"
• First two paragraphs can likely be combined

That's all I got for now. Great job, and I hope it reaches FA status. Grumpylawnchair (talk) 19:10, 24 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• ... which may have contributed to her growing awareness of social issues. Attribute this PoV to a scholar.
• ...perform sexual favors in exchange for work opportunities... A link to casting couch?

Excellent and interesting article. I also think it is very close to FA. Borsoka (talk) 08:24, 27 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]